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Friday, 1 March 2013

Little Red Riding Hood


Little Red Riding Hood. Once upon a time there lived a girl called Little Red Riding Hood. She was named Little Red Riding Hood because her lovely grandmother knitted her a nice red cloak with a hood on top when she was born and Little Red Riding Hood never took it off. She had beautiful long brown hair and dreamy blue eyes from her mother. Little Red Riding hood lived in cottage with her mother Crystal in a lovely place called Bunny Woods. Crystal heard that her mother was sick she and said to Little Red Riding Hood “Little Red RIding Hood it seems that granny has caught the cold, could you please give her these custard tarts?” “ Sure mum” she replied. “ But child you CAN NOT talk to strangers, okay Little Red Riding Hood?”. “ Yes mother” she replied. As she walked to granny’s cottage she came past a wolf. The wolf looked like a dog hunting for food, he was silent and Little Red Riding Hood saw his beady eyes and his black fur. He saw Little Red Riding Hood and quickly came to her side. He looked friendly and he asked Little Red Riding Hood “ Where are you on your way to, little girl?” “My Granny’s cottage, she is very ill and I’m giving her these homemade custard tarts for tea” she replied to him. “ Oh, well I can tell granny that you’re on your way to her” “ Thanks that would be very sincere”. The Wolf went to Granny’s cottage and knocked on the door. “ Who is it?” asked Granny. “ It is me Little Red Riding Hood, I have come here to have tea with you since you’re very ill Granny” “ The latch is on the door sweetie”. The Wolf opened the door and sprang into her room and swallowed her whole. The Wolf was almost full but saved the best for last. He disguised himself as granny and pulled the covers up to his neck and shut the curtains closed so she couldn’t see him. When she finally had got to granny’s cottage she knocked on the door “ Who is it?” “ It is me Little Red Riding Hood, I have come here to have tea with you since you’re very ill Granny”. “ The latch is on the door sweetie”. “Leave the stuff on the table and come to cuddle in with me”. “Granny what big ears you have” said Little Red Riding Hood. “More the better to hear you with my child”. “ Oh and what awful big eyes you have”. “ More the better to see you with darling”. “Granny and what big teeth you have”. “ More the better TO EAT YOU WITH”. He sprang out of the bed and swallowed her whole too. The wolf was very full and tired so he lay down on granny’s bed. Unfortunately the wolf was a loud snorer. When a wood cutter came past he heard the wolf snoring and went inside. He said “ I've been tracking you down for years. While he was asleep the woodcutter cut up his stomach and out popped Little Red Riding Hood and Granny. Then Little Red Riding Hood really learnt not to talk to strangers especially wolves. But then it was Granny’s birthday and well thats another.

Wednesday, 20 February 2013

Reflecting on my artwork.






Reflecting on my Silhouette Painting

1. Are you pleased with your Silhouette painting? why / why not?
Yes, because it is the first time I have made a blended sunset with a silhouette and I want to remember my first kind of artwork.


2. What did you find easy when you created your silhouette painting?
Folding the paper because it was easy to fold it because you can’t get anything wrong unless you haven’t been listening.


3. What part did you find tricky when you were creating your Silhouette painting? -think about blending of colours, tracing round your animal and painting within your animal.
Well definitely tracing the animal because once you think you're finished you have to check if you can see the traced animal on your artwork because if you can’t see the traced animal you have to start again but in the same spot.


4. Who / What helped you when you were painting?
Miss Paton helped me by showing me the steps to make
my silhouette painting.


5. What would you do differently next time? Think about: blending of colours, animal choice, presentation.
I would change how I painted my elephant because I didn’t take my time and I rushed.



6. What frustrated you when you created your Silhouette painting?
Tracing the animal because it's really hard.

Monday, 18 February 2013

All about me.



All about me
Malo lelei my name is Fine . I am 10 years old and I am year 6.  My favourite food are chocolate and pizza. My favourite colours are purple and blue. I like blue because it is the colour of the sea. My favourite movie is Pitch Perfect because it is a funny movie and the girls sing really nice. In my spare time I like to play video games and play sports especially soccer. In room 5  I would like to finishing my work on time.

My Personal Timeline. By Fine


 This is my Personal Timeline. It shows the year that I was born up to the year we are living. it shows all my milestones such as my first steps and starting school. I have put a lot of effort into this timeline so please leave feedback because I will reply.

Thursday, 14 February 2013

My Bio Poem.


Bio Poem

Fine

Who fears snakes, heights and toads.

Who loves chocolate, sports and reading.

Who wishes to be a doctor.

Who dislikes worms and bugs.

Who dreams of travelling the world.

Who plays touch and xbox 360 live.

Who enjoys  listening to music.

Who eats butter chicken and chocolate.

Who is a sister to Suliasi.

Who was born in Auckland New Zealand.


Tuesday, 18 December 2012

Fine's Peer Assessment on Taryn's Writing


Peer Assessment Narrative Checklist
Read over your partner’s work and judge their writing using the following criteria.

Narrative Criteria***
My partner has written an orientation*
My partner describes where the story takes place*
My partner has described when the story takes place*
My partner describes how the story begins*
My partner introduces characters*
My partner defines the characters’ personalities*

My partner describes what the characters look like*
My partner has created a problem that the characters experience*
My partner includes a resolution - how the problem / situation was solved *
My partner has written a final concluding statement*
My partner uses a variety of language features, e.g. active verbs, conjunctions, similes, metaphors, onomatopoeia, personification*


Peer Assessment Surface Features Checklist


Surface Features Criteria***
My partner writes in full sentences*
My partner sequences his/her ideas clearly*
My partner uses complex sentences*
My partner varies sentence beginnings*
My partner uses conjunctions e.g. “and” correctly*
My partner uses capital letters correctly throughout writing*
My partner uses full stops correctly throughout writing*
My partner spells all words correctly*
My partner proof reads his / her writing*
My partner edits his/her writing-by making changes to the vocabulary e.g. said - yelled, asked, etc. *
My partner writes in paragraphs*

Today I did a checklist. As you can see Taryn's has to do nothing at all she has done all that she was needed to do. Taryn has done excellent work and I think that her story was perfect.

My presentation to the class based on ANZAC.


Angel, Fine, Isabella from Joy Paton on Vimeo.

Friday, 7 December 2012

Our presentation based on Anzac. By Fine



This is our presentation based on Anzac. We worked hard and got a lot of information. We hope you take a look and leave feedback.

My Rubric based on my presentation.


Topic Presentation: Rubric

Presenter: ___fine________________________ Assessor___Raymond_____________________



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Loud clear voice
Presenter speaks in a soft voice e.g. whisper. May mumble during presentation. Words / sentences are very unclear and may not be understood by the audience.
Presenter’s voice maybe very clear in some of the presentation, but may revert back to soft / mumbling voice. Not all words / sentences may not be understood by the audience.
Projects voice in most parts, but may mumble, or speak softly in 1-2 sentences / words. Most words are understood by the audience.
Projects voice throughout the performance. Voice is loud and clear. Every word / sentence is understood by the audience.

Eye contact
No eye contact is given to the audience.
The presenter refers to cue cards. The presenter refers to the slide and reads off the slide resulting in some eye contact given to the audience, but not much.  
The presenter looks at the audience and gives eye for most of the presentation. Cue cards are referred to for some of the presentation.
Eye contact is given throughout the presentation. The presenter gives eye contact to the audience throughout the entire presentation.

Knowledge of Topic
Information is not known. Presenter freezes on the spot and relies on his / her team to rescue them through their slide / presentation. There are not any cue cards used.
Information is read off the screen. Cue cards are referred to throughout the presentation. There is no extra / expanded information.
Some information off the slides is memorised and is learnt off by heart. Cue cards are occasionally referred to during the presentation. Presenter expands on information by giving a few examples.
Information is memorised and is learnt off by heart. Cue cards are not referred to during the presentation. Presenter expands on information by giving lots of examples.

Slide Layout
Font is difficult to read against the background colour. The Font itself is very hard to read. Pictures do not relate to the question/s being asked. There is an imbalance of pictures and writing, e.g. Too many pictures on the entire slide. There are spelling, grammar and typing errors on the slide.
4 or more errors on the
slide.
Some of the font is difficult to read against the background colour. Some pictures relate and other pictures don’t to the question asked. There is an imbalance of pictures and writing in some parts of the slide. There are some spelling, grammar and typing errors on the slide. 3 errors on the slide.
The majority of the font is easy to read against background colour. The font is easy to read, but hard to read in some areas of the slide. Most pictures relate to the question being asked. There are a few spelling, grammar and typing errors on slide.
1-2 errors.  
All the font is easy to read against the background colour. Writing is easy to read. Pictures are appropriate the question being asked.  
There is an excellent balance of writing and pictures on the slide. There are not any spelling, grammar or typing errors on the slide.
Summarising of information
Information is copied from sources.  This is obvious as there is a lot  of copying and pasting.
This is throughout the entire presentation.
Some information is copied.  This is sh. own through 3-4 slides
Information is difficult to understand as this is not in the child’s language
Most information is put into own words. Only 1-2 slides have copied information. This maybe due to the context of topic and the lack of personal experience.  
Information is put in own words. Language is easy to understand.
Sources of information
Uses 1 source of information, e.g. a website
Uses 2 sources of information e.g. 2 websites or 1 website and a book, 2 books used
Uses 3 sources of information which may include books, websites
Uses four or more sources of information which includes websites, books
Referencing of information
Material is not referenced. This is not displayed at the end of the presentation
Some material is referenced, not quite finished
Most material is referenced. This includes websites and books.
Material is referenced, URL’s are included. Book’s and websites are referenced. APA referencing is used.

This is a Rubric one of my classmates did while I was presenting a presentation based on ANZAC with some of my friends. I need to keep eye contact and I need to know what i'm saying and more, I hope you can give feedback or even some advice on how to present good. 

                                                       THANK YOU